Comments on: In The Jungle, The Concrete Jungle http://www.fantasyinminiature.com/2009/12/in-the-jungle-the-concrete-jungle/ Short-short fiction by Alexandra Erin Wed, 08 Feb 2012 22:07:53 -0800 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: Steph http://www.fantasyinminiature.com/2009/12/in-the-jungle-the-concrete-jungle/comment-page-1/#comment-156 Steph Mon, 07 Dec 2009 02:35:28 +0000 http://www.fantasyinminiature.com/?p=94#comment-156 Gah, that is heartbreaking. I love the wordplay.. Gah, that is heartbreaking.

I love the wordplay..

]]> By: Lysaea http://www.fantasyinminiature.com/2009/12/in-the-jungle-the-concrete-jungle/comment-page-1/#comment-144 Lysaea Fri, 04 Dec 2009 00:34:22 +0000 http://www.fantasyinminiature.com/?p=94#comment-144 Nice. Small tense shift in the third sentence "was as badly faded as he was, he's" with he's being [he IS]. Other than that, no critique. Nice little snippet =) Nice. Small tense shift in the third sentence “was as badly faded as he was, he’s” with he’s being [he IS]. Other than that, no critique. Nice little snippet =)

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